composition-changes in me
【题目】
写一篇以前你是什么样子的，现在的你是什么样子的短文。
可以用以下提示词，不少于5句话。
(quiet, active, short, tall, thin, strong, go cycling, ice-skate,...)
一、审题：
以前——一般过去时（过去式）
现在——一般现在时（原形）
以前： before, 3 years ago, then, at that time
现在： now
二、选择标题。Changes in me
Then and Now
Before and Now
列表
过去和现在对比，一一对应。
可以从外貌、性格、能力、爱好等方面作对比。
列3点最佳。
三、写作
1、分3段。
总——分——总。
如果通篇只有一段，看得阅卷老师眼睛累，增加阅卷负担，会影响作文分数哦～
每段前面空2个字母。
2、注重开头。
开头用适当的、高级的句子放在开头，起到一鸣惊人的效果。给阅卷老师一个震撼：嗯，这个人英语很不错嘛～
3、注重结尾。
开头和结尾，是阅卷老师非常注重的部分。
有个漂亮的开头，再加上一个漂亮的结尾，再次给予阅卷老师一个震撼：这孩子，英语果然很不错呢！给高分！一定给高分！
4、注意字迹工整、卷面整洁。
（1）字不能太小，不然增加阅卷老师的阅卷难度。你给他们找麻烦，他们也会给你找麻烦哦——扣分！
字也不能太大。不然就不美观，整体看起来会很凌乱。
（2）字迹一定要工整，不能涂涂改改、影响整体效果。
改作文的阅卷老师改一篇英语作文不会十秒。看标题、开头、结尾，中间扫一眼，打分。
如果没发现错误，加上你的字迹工整、卷面整洁，恭喜你，你至少能拿8分哦～
（3）单词中间不能涂改。
单词也不能转行。
（4）如果你涂涂改改——oh no，这个人写作文吞吞吐吐，自己都没想好自己说什么，英语肯定不会很好。扣分！扣分！
关于字迹工整。
有句话叫做：“字如其人。”阅卷老师大都是这样想的。
你连英语字母都写不好，成绩肯定不会好到哪里去。扣分扣分！
如果你字迹工整、卷面整洁，就算发现了一些错误，阅卷老师也可能会心情好得放过你：一定是考试太紧张了，没关系没关系，字这么好看，少扣点分！
如果真实水平是6分的作文，字不好看，可能只得到3分；如果字好看，说不定能得8分呢！
如果真是水平是8分的作文，字好看，10分送给你送给你；如果字不好看，哎呀，给个6分就算了。
三、易错句型。
1. Now, I very strong.
2. Well, I was short.
3. Now, I very like winter.
4. Now, I like ice-skate.
5. I'm taller then before.
6. Now, I am tall and strong than before.
7. Before, I was quiet. Now, I active in the class.
8. Now, I am every active in class.
9. Before, I was quiet. Now, I am active in the class. I'm taller than before. I always talk with joy.
10. Before, i didn't like winter. Because, it was too cold.
11. Hello, I'm Amy. I 13 years old.
12. 因果倒置
Before, I didn't like winter. So, I couldn't go cycling. Now, I love winter, so I can go ice-skating.
13. didn't 和couldn't 用法混乱
二者都表示否定。 couldn't 表示不能，没有能力。didn't表示不，有能力但是不愿意做。
Before, I was short. I didn't go cycling.
Before, I couldn't like winter.
14. 逻辑混乱。
Before, I could play badminton. Now, I can't play badminton.
Before, I was active. Now, I'm quiet. I always talk with joy.
15. be 动词乱用。
Hello, I'm Amy. I 13 years old.
Before, I short. Now, I tall.
Before, I was short. Now, I was tall.
Before, I'm couldn't go cycling.Now, I'm can ride a bike.
be动词用法：
(1)是
(2)be＋形容词(…的)
(3)be＋动ing
(4)be going to+动原 (表将来)
不能加be动词的情况。
(1)动词原形。 l'm like to go ice-skating.
(2)动词过去式。 I'm rode a horse last weekend.
四、开头
1. Hi, everyone. I'm Amy. I'm 12 years old.
I'm different now.
2.Changes are around me.
3.Changes are with me.
4. Everything is changing. Me too!
五、中间。
（一）外貌对比
1.（身高）Before, I was short. Now, I'm taller than before.
2.（体重）Before, I was thin. Now, I'm stronger than before.
3.（身高＋体重）Before, I was short and thin. Now, I'm taller and stronger than before.
4.（头发） Before, I had short hair. Now, I have long hair.
5.（眼镜） Before, I didn't wear glasses. but now, I wear glasses.
二、性格对比
quiet-active, shy-funny, strict-friendly/funny,
（not）hard-working at school, (not) helpful at home/school
(1) Before, I was quiet. Now, I'm very active in class. Ialways talk with joy.
(2) Once I wasn'tan active girl. I didn't talk a lot.
Now, I talk more than before. I always talk with joy.
过去、现在写一句也可以。写你不会写错的。
三、能力对比(couldn't/ can+动原)
1. Before, I couldn't go cycling. Now, I can ride a bike.
I ride a bike every day.
(I like it very much.)
(I'm good at riding a bike.)
go cycling= ride a bike
ice-skate = go ice-skating
(球类)play badminton (乐器类)play the piano
do sports= play sports
clean my room= do the cleaning
wash my clothes
cook do kung fu
make a snowman
swim =go swimming
四、爱好对比
didn't like/ like+动ing
+to +动原
liked/ don't like+动ing
+to +动原
1. Before, I didn't like winter. I thought it was too cold, and I couldn't go cycling.
Now I like to ice-skate, so I like winter.
(spring, summer, autumn, winter)
2. (music, sports, English, maths)
Before, I didn't like music. Because it was too hard(困难). Now, I can play the piano. So I like music very much.
五、tips
1、可以把外貌、性格、能力、爱好相结合，写作更出彩。
2、高级词汇、高级句子可以为你的作文增加光彩。
3、但是，如果你不确定写地对不对，还是改用一般的词汇、一般的句子吧。
因为错词、错句会扣分，而且很严重。
4、过去和现在对比，以三个为宜。
如果句子足够多，两个也可以。
5、写作一般不少于5句话。不多于10句话。
6、不要通篇都是Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,...
写作并不是造句子。
7、表示过去，可以用before, then, at that time, 3 years ago
时间可以放句首，也可以放句末。
放句首，需要加逗号，放句末则不需要。
六、范文(一)
Changes in me
Hello, everyone. I'm Amy. I'm different now.
3 years ago, I was short and thin. I couldn't ride a bike. Now, I'm taller and stronger than before. So I can cycling. I like it very much.
What a big change!
Then and Now
Everything is changing. Me too!
Before, I had short hair. But now, I have long hair. Once I wasn't an active girl. I didn't talk a lot. Now, I talk more than before. I always talk with joy.
Changes are with me.
Before and Now
Hi, myname is Mike. Changes are with me.
3 years ago, I didn't wear glasses. I was quiet in class. At that time, I didn't like music. I thought it was too hard(难).
But now, I wear glasses. And I'm very active in class. I like music very much, because I can play the piano.
I'm different now. What about you?
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